Writing a letter to POTUS, need proof readers (final draft)

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President Donald J. Trump
The White House
1600 Pennsylvania Avenue, NW
Washington, DC 20500
Dear Mr. President,
My name is <insert real name here>, I reside in <insert location here>.
There’s a six year old boy named James Younger who lives in Texas. James’s mother is currently forcing this boy to be a girl. James clearly prefers to be a boy. His mother is ready to have him injected with the chemicals to change him into a girl when he turns eight years old. The boy’s father, Jeff Younger, has been fighting to get full custody of James. James’s parents are divorced. Jeff’s also been fighting to prevent James from getting the chemicals injected into him as well. He’s all alone in the case going against the two biggest law firms in Texas. He lost his job since he had been accused by his ex-wife of child abuse for telling James he’s a boy.
The website setup to support the father’s case claims that the chemicals can “cause serious damage including sterility and bone density issues.” The court has prevented Jeff from telling James he’s a boy. Jeff also can’t discuss his religious views with James as well. Jeff also must refer to James as “Luna” in public, per a court order. Apparently in Texas, doctors can perform sex-change surgeries on kids as young as eight years old. And, the parent that doesn’t have primary custody can be forced by the courts to pay for such surgery. If they don’t, they can lose parental rights along with receiving jail time.
I feel the laws need to be changed to prevent this from happening to young children. Also, Texas Governor Gregg Abbott should be made aware of this as well along with the Texas State Legislature. Former Texas State Representative Matt Rinaldi had supported Jeff’s case. A letter that former Texas State Rep. Rinaldi wrote to Jeff will be enclosed with this letter.
I have enclosed multiple documents from the website supporting Jeff’s case. There’s more information on the website as well if you’d like to read further on this case. There’s also court documents on the website regarding the case that can be read as well.
Please write back to me to make sure that the President has gotten my letter. Either he himself can write it to me or someone from his staff can. My return address is <insert address here>. This is not what America should do to its children.
Sincerely,

I'm making another post for the final draft so I can get last opinions before mailing this off to the White House. I'm mainly looking at the last sentence "Please write back to me to make sure that the President has gotten my letter. Either he himself can write it to me or someone from his staff can." Thanks again everyone Edit: Needed to reword a sentence Edit 2: Needed to move a sentence and add return address - President Donald J. Trump - The White House - 1600 Pennsylvania Avenue, NW - Washington, DC 20500 - Dear Mr. President, - My name is <insert real name here>, I reside in <insert location here>. - There’s a six year old boy named James Younger who lives in Texas. James’s mother is currently forcing this boy to be a girl. James clearly prefers to be a boy. His mother is ready to have him injected with the chemicals to change him into a girl when he turns eight years old. The boy’s father, Jeff Younger, has been fighting to get full custody of James. James’s parents are divorced. Jeff’s also been fighting to prevent James from getting the chemicals injected into him as well. He’s all alone in the case going against the two biggest law firms in Texas. He lost his job since he had been accused by his ex-wife of child abuse for telling James he’s a boy. - The website setup to support the father’s case claims that the chemicals can “cause serious damage including sterility and bone density issues.” The court has prevented Jeff from telling James he’s a boy. Jeff also can’t discuss his religious views with James as well. Jeff also must refer to James as “Luna” in public, per a court order. Apparently in Texas, doctors can perform sex-change surgeries on kids as young as eight years old. And, the parent that doesn’t have primary custody can be forced by the courts to pay for such surgery. If they don’t, they can lose parental rights along with receiving jail time. - I feel the laws need to be changed to prevent this from happening to young children. Also, Texas Governor Gregg Abbott should be made aware of this as well along with the Texas State Legislature. Former Texas State Representative Matt Rinaldi had supported Jeff’s case. A letter that former Texas State Rep. Rinaldi wrote to Jeff will be enclosed with this letter. - I have enclosed multiple documents from the website supporting Jeff’s case. There’s more information on the website as well if you’d like to read further on this case. There’s also court documents on the website regarding the case that can be read as well. - Please write back to me to make sure that the President has gotten my letter. Either he himself can write it to me or someone from his staff can. My return address is <insert address here>. This is not what America should do to its children. - Sincerely, <insert real name here>

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